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[therealkorey]

Thanks give me your honest opinion on a scale of 1 to 10 and would you like to see more if you could.

[kav]

Write character-plot is secondary. We have no idea what any of these people are like, what their personality is. Avoid just thrusting generic people into 'situations'.

[therealkorey]

rate it 1 to 10 for me

[kav]

rate it 1 to 10 for me

That would be difficult....what book do you consider a '10'?

[bronze_rules]

rate it 1 to 10 for me

 

I suggest to put up a poll, you'll likely get more responses that way.

[therealkorey]

i basically just want to know what people think of the story, are you curious to see more?

[kav]

i basically just want to know what people think of the story, are you curious to see more?

I want to know more about the people than the story....

[miraclemet]

Write character-plot is secondary. We have no idea what any of these people are like, what their personality is. Avoid just thrusting generic people into 'situations'.

 

Agreed.

 

I connected with the father/daughter combo and they are gone by page 4.

 

As it sits a 2 or 3 out of 10, with little interest in reading more.

[therealkorey]

that is coming up in the story. but i agree it should have been introduced more in the beginning.

[therealkorey]

ok thank you for your honesty i appreciate that and i will work on it.